Saturday, March 3, 2012

Socio Cultural : Suicide among Teenagers


 As a junior reporter writing for a local daily,you have been asked to write a short article on the suicide problem  among teenagers.Your article should integrate all the information given below.You should write 150 to 200 words.
   

                     Suicide Problem Among Teenagers
                                 by Rainie Yang

    The chart above illustrated that the suicide rates among teenagers in year 2005.The countries that always involved in this problem were Australia,United States,New Zealand and United Kingdom.There were the differences suicide among teenagers between this four countries and the causes of the teens suicide in 2005.
     
      Based on the bar graph,the number of suicide cases was the highest in USA(200 cases) followed by U.K and Australia and the lowest number of suicide cases was New Zealand(50 cases).There were a lot of differences in the number of suicide cases between the lowest and the highest which is 150.It was about three quarter of the teen suicides in 2005 was physiological disorder especially depression that show it was the main reason why the teen commit suicides.Hence the other factors were misuse of alcohol and drugs which having the same rate with the factor about lack relationships with parents and peers.Whereas,the minor factor was suffered physical and sexual abuse.
     
      In the other word,this investigation can be concluded that there were many cases of teen suicides occur year by year.This must be prevented immediately so that the rates of people suicide decreased  every year.Parents should play vital.This problem must be dealt seriously.

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4 comments:

  1. Assalamualaikum wbt.

    for the last paragraph you've stated:"this must be prevented immediately so that no people die every year(?)".Can we be sure that there is not even a single death for a year?thought you should add something to this sentence..

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  2. Assalamualaikum.. Hope you have a happy day today!! I think you must use past tense in your article because it had happen already. Furthermore, you must include title and the author in your article. May Allah bless us!!

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    1. Waalaikumussallam..w.b.t..thank you for your meanigful comments..i had edited our post..Hope u guys be happy with them.

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  3. I think there is something rong with the grammar for this sentence:
    Hence the other factors were misuse of alcohol and drugs which having the same rate with the factor about lack relationships with parents and peers.
    -shouldn't it be:
    Hence the other factors were misuse of alcohol and drugs which have the same rate with the factor for lack of relationships between parents and peers.
    -this is only based on my opinion but i hope you will take it into consideration, thank you

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